Writing Stuff

I have been writing or should I say rewriting my novel, this is to send to someone who is going to give me some feedback. on things like Story, plot, characters and so on.

This being my first novel length story, I have learnt quite a bit about how I write and have seen many problems while also seeing many good points. A bad point for example is the show don’t tell rule. I seem to be breaking this over and over again, this will lead to many rewrites, not of the whole book just the relevant bits. I am also noticing that I break into the ‘he thought’ and ‘she thought’ quite a bit at times. This again make for the show don’t tell rule. when I’m in there head and conveying there thoughts then I’m telling and not showing. this is ok if say I want to get the characters from one part of town to the other with no relevant story needed to be told about that journey.

Example : He thought, it best to lead his team straight to the station, when reaching the tall door, he thought. God I’m pleased to have got them here safely.

This although a bad sentence gets rid of many pages of description that would have been written if I showed then getting to the police station. The story should dictate whether it is needed or not. The problem is when I’m writing and its 11:30pm my eyes are falling closed on every breath. then it seems easy to replace five pages with one sentence.

But now that I work through the manuscript my tardiness is obvious. It makes me question the rule (there are many rules about this writing lark) just write no matter how bad you can sort it out in the second draft. now I’m in second draft it seam I should have been more decisive.

I think you learn as you write.

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The Beauty of Woman

You know, you drive around, the sun breaks through the clouds. We feel warm and happy.

I think you can see a definite change in women in general when this happens. In the winter months, when it’s cloudy, it’s raining, or drizzle, it feels miserable. Oh did I forget Wet and damp. Well women cover up they have there hats on, umbrellas and big coats.

We don’t really see then. We just don’t notice them. They become part of the grey back ground.

I’m talking from a male point of view, from a mans point of veiw, I like to think of myself as a mans man, I believe in traditional values.

So as soon as that sun comes out woman change, they evolve like a butterfly, they will go from this coved up form, kin to a nun and then transform into a beautiful creature. They really do entice us all, my male friends pretty much say the same thing, we all notice. with the first bit of sun that the first thing a man notices is women. It Isn’t the sun its self, we love the sun only because women are gorgeous and I’m including my wife she is very gorgeous. (also to protect against fallback I only ever look at my wife, she is the only gorgeous woman for me) now that done I will carry on.
Even my wife does the same, see changes, see becomes vibrant and colourful, there is a little bit of flesh that starts to show this is coved up in the winter months. The skirts, the makeup, and then the smile.

This is the most important of the changes, the smile comes on most faces. We drive round the streets or we walk round the town centres, we go for walks at the weekends. If the suns out with blue sky’s and fluffy clouds then people smile and I presume men are smiling just as much as woman, it’s just that I don’t really notice as much. That’s because I find woman attractive. I dare say a man who finds men attractive would find them smiling alot. I would like to think that I smile more in the summer.
So I think this post is a testament to all women, to say thank you for uplifting my day and most other men’s day. I don’t think you realise what impact you have on us men of the world.

So Thanks.

Fried egg on a shovel

I fulfilled a dream today to fry an egg with only fire and a shovel.

Ever since I was a child and saw the fire stoker of a steam engine. They fried an egg on a shovel.

I cannot remember where I was at the time, I must have been quite young maybe six or seven. A large steam engine shunted it’s way up the platform, smoke enveloping us all filling our nostrils with smoke leaving a bitter taste in our mouths. I remember thinking It might not stop, afraid that I might miss the train, My brothers told me when heading for the platform that we had missed the train, so seeing it go past filled me with dread ( I was very young). I think they did this just to wind me up. The train did stop, we climbed aboard, we sat in a compartment with six seats not the rows of two you get now.

I imagine you would have had great conversations and could have met people of many varieties over long distances. Or it could have been equally as bad if you got a seat next to a boring person or some nasty old man. (sorry I didn’t mean to stereotype here)

There was a sliding door which led to a corridor, me and my brothers would run up and down from one end of the carriage to the other. My mother would come out and find us standing leaning out the windows waiting for another train to come the other way. My brothers also told me if a train came the other way it would chop off my head. (I still don’t put my head out of train windows)

It really was Great fun.

I apologise for my digression, back to the egg and the shovel, tonight I fried the egg on a shovel, below is the proof.

(Kids don’t try this at home, like I did)

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Ok I admit it’s a garden burner not a steam engine. But the concept is the same, well I think it is.

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Fire is a very intoxicating thing it always makes me want to feed it more.

Character development.

I had a conversation the other day with a friend of mine, it involved my take on character development.
I know there are many ways of doing this, like writing down the characters life in great detail, give the character a life story on paper. Where they were born, when they got and so on picking out all the life changing events. So you have a sense of what this character would do in any give situation.

Now I may be wrong here so this is not advice more like my experience so far. In other words I withhold the right to change my mind.

Someone has asked me if they can read my novel called Purple.(working title) So before handing it over to someone who has edited a book for someone before. (in other words her opinion has weight)

I could not help but go through the novel again, Just to iron out any spelling mistakes and minor issues. I think it best to leave it in its raw form until i get feed back.It seems each time I go through words I can find more and more stuff.
Now I came across a character that I could not remember, I know gosh horror what should it be a cut throat or hung from the rafters. My friend asked me, did I not right a character profile about all the characters first? My answer was no I did not.
And this is why.
I write of the cuff, let’s say I have an idea. Then I will sit down and begin to write, not plot development or characters. Just stat with the place and person, then work through the situation. Other characters might come, new situations will develop or they may not. Then it becomes one of the tens of other two or three thousand word files. Some have a much higher word count.
The thing is each and every one of these characters I know inside and out from the start. Each character is fully formed I know what they will do and how they will do it.

As for plot that’s a different issue. I will when I work out how I do it tell you. Up to now I don’t know If my plots are worthy. That’s until I get something published.